tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post3994680673610184361..comments2024-02-17T06:06:58.131-05:00Comments on AP Literature 2010 - 2011: Red Shift Model Paper Example 5R. Gallagherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01320082679219510745noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-58788105910960415932007-10-09T01:27:00.000-04:002007-10-09T01:27:00.000-04:00Meaghan starting with the explanation of the title...Meaghan starting with the explanation of the title was a great start. Both of Meaghan's grammar, vocab, and use of language are great (compared to me (currently)anyways). She does a great job analyzing tone, the meaning of the words used, and the overall meaning of the poem.kev.tr.5..https://www.blogger.com/profile/06822089541163345699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-74875962269551624712007-10-09T00:40:00.000-04:002007-10-09T00:40:00.000-04:00I think Meaghan did a good job on analyzing the di...I think Meaghan did a good job on analyzing the diction and tone change. I like the way she made her whole paper flow smoothly, and she used decent vocabularies correctly.Shuyi G 6https://www.blogger.com/profile/05339089587509875906noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-76377082915931880502007-10-08T22:12:00.000-04:002007-10-08T22:12:00.000-04:00Meaghan’s explication of Ted Berrigan’s ‘Red Shift...Meaghan’s explication of Ted Berrigan’s ‘Red Shift' formulated well. She also has a strong solid thesis. She makes sure that she stays on the topic that she chose to write about. She does a great job on making clear points.CasieS P5https://www.blogger.com/profile/03296104477479072431noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-13282283606421769642007-10-08T19:31:00.000-04:002007-10-08T19:31:00.000-04:00Through the use of rich vocabulary and thorough ev...Through the use of rich vocabulary and thorough evidence, Meaghan crafts a very intellectual and coherent explication of the poem. Her excellent topic and concluding sentences of each paragraph tie back to the thesis both effectively and subtly, making the explication easy to read and understand.Kevin Tanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18293871552079591341noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-80287306258171407292007-10-08T17:14:00.000-04:002007-10-08T17:14:00.000-04:00Meghan's explication of the Red Shift is organiz...Meghan's explication of the Red Shift is organized and well written. She has evidence though out the poem to back up her ideas. She sticks to her topic of tones and did not digress. Overall, I feel that this type of explication is excellent.Wendy C.5https://www.blogger.com/profile/17378217702785802317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-70214961672792325042007-10-08T15:53:00.001-04:002007-10-08T15:53:00.001-04:00thespina g 6 said... There is most definitely a ve...thespina g 6 said... <BR/>There is most definitely a very good reason that Meaghan's essay is one of the examples used. I've always admired Meaghan's efficient writing style. She is always to the point and uses her vocabulary in the most efficient ways. In this particular explication essay on the poem, "Red Shift" by Ted Berrigan, Meaghan builds a brilliant thesis and elaborates deeply throughout the paper. Meaghan adds detail and depth to every sentence and clears up anything the reader might be confused about. At least, that was the effect it had on me. My absolute favorite sentence is the second to last. Her conclusion sums up the paper in an efficent and simple way. Through her complexity, Meaghan simplifies her thesis.Thespina says:https://www.blogger.com/profile/01434760485374068899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-9229915930985409182007-10-08T15:53:00.000-04:002007-10-08T15:53:00.000-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Thespina says:https://www.blogger.com/profile/01434760485374068899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-30921458537056812742007-10-08T14:53:00.001-04:002007-10-08T14:53:00.001-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.michelle phttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07727519593866771251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-89835486649539165962007-10-08T14:53:00.000-04:002007-10-08T14:53:00.000-04:00Meaghan’s explication of Ted Berrigan’s ‘Red Shift...Meaghan’s explication of Ted Berrigan’s ‘Red Shift’ does a great job of almost getting into the mindset of Ted Berrigan himself. Throughout her cited evidence and other examples, there is a reference to what Berrigan could have been thinking or why such lines were used, etc. These examples are also integrated very well, along with a great vocabulary that is sophisticated but not hard to understand, given that the context is explained so thoroughly. Meaghan did a good job of not getting lost or losing track of her thesis. The thesis and title of the poem is used frequently throughout the explication, giving a tie and understanding in the essay. Overall, I feel it’s the best explication written.michelle phttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07727519593866771251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-79480778835826977802007-10-08T00:51:00.000-04:002007-10-08T00:51:00.000-04:00Meaghan's essay is successful in the sense that sh...Meaghan's essay is successful in the sense that she has backed up her thesis with evidence throughout the poem. However, I think that she should give more explication in paragraph 2. And, the last sentence in the third paragraph does not agree with the facts. I love the second to last sentence of her essay.Ping L 6https://www.blogger.com/profile/08882238569423131532noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-20975481643502535642007-10-07T20:15:00.000-04:002007-10-07T20:15:00.000-04:00Meaghan’s explication of Berrigan’s poem is very a...Meaghan’s explication of Berrigan’s poem is very astute and precise. Her evidence flows evenly and coincides with her thesis. I like her thesis the most because it’s right to the point. She uses exceptional vocabulary to bring her thoughts together. Meaghan’s conclusion was good too. It wrapped up her ideas nicely. By reading her explication <BR/>I now have a better understanding of Berrigan’s poem.Doris T5https://www.blogger.com/profile/16545823769555758919noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-92218486424835189512007-10-07T15:52:00.000-04:002007-10-07T15:52:00.000-04:00There is a reason why Meaghan’s essay is one of th...There is a reason why Meaghan’s essay is one of the examples. Her explication of the poem went step by step just like it was supposed to be done. As I read her essay, I got the impression that I was reading the poem again but with a Ted Berrigan director’s cut. All aspects of the poem were analyzed and spoken about. NICE JOB MEAGHAN!!!!Michael R. 6https://www.blogger.com/profile/11365612107306255055noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-18592573481305982382007-10-06T23:55:00.000-04:002007-10-06T23:55:00.000-04:00Meaghan’s explication is well organized and insigh...Meaghan’s explication is well organized and insightful. She introduces her key points in her thesis then follows it by elaborating more on her subject giving examples to support her thesis. Also, she maintains a grasp on her thoughts that allows the reader to clearly understand her points.Rodney B5https://www.blogger.com/profile/05459689163665970622noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-65228853159996356562007-10-06T23:42:00.000-04:002007-10-06T23:42:00.000-04:00Meaghan’s “Red Shift” explication is organized and...Meaghan’s “Red Shift” explication is organized and cohesive. Her introduction paragraph outlines the key points of her explication. Each of the following paragraphs provides examples that connect back to her thesis. Meaghan’s explication is successful because she elaborates on the literary techniques that the authors decide to use and its effectiveness.Chrizzy Teenyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03779253140166072382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-8453425057880913742007-10-06T12:31:00.000-04:002007-10-06T12:31:00.000-04:00Meaghan gives birth to a brilliant explication thr...Meaghan gives birth to a brilliant explication through her usage of vocabulary and integration of evidence. She expresses her thoughts very clearly and her explication if very well written.William C5https://www.blogger.com/profile/00845541807092154490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-43374275197896304072007-10-05T18:24:00.000-04:002007-10-05T18:24:00.000-04:00Meaghan wrote an exceptionally well written explic...Meaghan wrote an exceptionally well written explication of this poem. I thought she described what she meant very well, and that she has a great vocabulary. Her ideas are interesting and I feel I have a broader understanding of Ted Berrigan's tone in this poem.Caitlin H 5https://www.blogger.com/profile/06665309978660685972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8411145127857089342.post-54551477001191609032007-10-04T20:49:00.000-04:002007-10-04T20:49:00.000-04:00I think Meaghan’s paper is very well written. She...I think Meaghan’s paper is very well written. She efficiently makes the evidence flow with her sentences. She uses very good vocabulary throughout the essay. I thought it is great how she explained the title in the beginning, her reasoning and evidence backed up her topics very well. I had similar ideas about the title. Her conclusion is strong and connects the evidence to her thesis. I liked how she described the poem as being “vague” noting that the poem is open to different interpretation because many people have different opinions on what the poem’s true meaning actually is.Emily R 6https://www.blogger.com/profile/17612480376138582907noreply@blogger.com